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Armello Haikus
« on: November 08, 2015, 10:31:49 PM »
Hey there! Since the first Armello poems and songs start their appearance here, I thought it would be great to get all of you to train your creative brains. Let's create some Armello Haikus! For those of you who haven't heard of Haikus, here is the deal: Haikus are a traditional japanese form of poems, which use three lines of text, in which a defined number of Morens are allowed (these are not syllables, but sound-units, so a mora would be a short vowel followed by a consonant or a syllable with a short vowel- a long vowel or a short vowel followed by more than one consonant would count as two morens).
In order to create some easier Haikus lets just count syllables. In each line of a traditional Haiku you would be allowed a specific number of morens/syllables- this would be 5-7-5.

So, I will start with this:

The rat draws the knife.
Cold steel cuts the night in half.
Death awaits the Bear.

or:

Kings roar fills the night.
Banes chase the furry heroes.
No escape in sight.

Another:
 
Barnaby's high geared
Zosha draws a cat burglar.
Naked Hare feels cold.

So, lets see what you have got up your sleeve!
« Last Edit: December 27, 2015, 10:05:19 AM by Phlox »
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Re: Armello Haikus
« Reply #1 on: November 09, 2015, 10:03:47 AM »
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I hope to see a treasure.
Oops! Another Bane!
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Re: Armello Haikus
« Reply #2 on: November 11, 2015, 01:41:13 PM »
I have the rot now
It's eating me alive, There's no  excape.
Druids wait, Am i saved?

How's that? Is that a good haiku?
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Re: Armello Haikus
« Reply #3 on: November 11, 2015, 03:26:05 PM »
That's the right idea Armellian, but you have the wrong number of syllables in the second and third lines. Traditionally, it should be:

5 syllables

7 syllables

5 syllables

As Phlox explained, haiku in Japanese do not use syllables in the same sense that Western languages use the term, but the meaning is similar enough that for haiku in English, counting syllables is a good enough approximation.
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Re: Armello Haikus
« Reply #4 on: November 11, 2015, 03:32:03 PM »
That's the right idea Armellian, but you have the wrong number of syllables in the second and third lines. Traditionally, it should be:

5 syllables

7 syllables

5 syllables

As Phlox explained, haiku in Japanese do not use syllables in the same sense that Western languages use the term, but the meaning is similar enough that for haiku in English, counting syllables is a good enough approximation.
Ah, Ok.. I understand now.. I was taught haikus in a different way.. I was taught that a haiku was five words 7 words 5 words.. But now after your clarification, I finally understand. Thank you!!
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Re: Armello Haikus
« Reply #5 on: November 12, 2015, 01:00:37 AM »
Anyway, go ahead! Can't wait to read your  haikus!
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Re: Armello Haikus
« Reply #6 on: November 17, 2015, 11:31:40 AM »
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Re: Armello Haikus
« Reply #7 on: November 18, 2015, 05:47:03 AM »
I don't know how to count syllables in English, so I used a counter I found on the internet.

5-The city feels cold and still
7-Echoes from the derelict ruins
5-Foggy is the time ahead

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Re: Armello Haikus
« Reply #8 on: November 18, 2015, 09:43:31 AM »
The Ci-ty feels cold and still  (that's 7 syllables). 
E choes from the de re lict ruins (8 syallables).
Fog gy is the time a head (7 syllables).

Syllables are the pieces that make up words.  Generally when you change "vowel" sound, you change syllable.  Vowels that stick together (i in ruins) or silent vowels (e in time) don't get their own syllable.

So what would fit

The city feels cold
Echoes from the Derelict        (the a-ged ruins would also work)
Foggy is the time.

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Re: Armello Haikus
« Reply #9 on: November 18, 2015, 11:16:08 AM »
The Ci-ty feels cold and still  (that's 7 syllables). 
E choes from the de re lict ruins (8 syallables).
Fog gy is the time a head (7 syllables).

Syllables are the pieces that make up words.  Generally when you change "vowel" sound, you change syllable.  Vowels that stick together (i in ruins) or silent vowels (e in time) don't get their own syllable.

So what would fit

The city feels cold
Echoes from the Derelict        (the a-ged ruins would also work)
Foggy is the time.
Well, thanks for the info. That website needs some work. >.>

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Re: Armello Haikus
« Reply #10 on: November 18, 2015, 11:22:05 AM »
Yeah, it's impossible to have less syllables than words!